Query Critique Day: Magnetic
♥ Time for some community feedback! ♥
Jeanmarie Anaya is the first lucky “winner” from May’s Query Day, and so her shiny, revised query is now ready for some group feedback!
As always, be HELPFUL, be gentle, and leave your comments below.
I enjoyed hearing you speak at the Backspace Agent-Author Seminar in November on the topic of recent trends in the YA market. You mentioned you were interested in paranormal YA. I hope my novel, MAGNETIC, will fit your list.
If seventeen year-old Carly Reynolds can get her ass to class, she could graduate high school, escape her mundane life, and put that rock star image of hers to good use. But perfect attendance ranks pretty low on the priority list when random strangers stalk her every move—including at school. Having groupies would ordinarily be a good thing for an aspiring musician, but not when the groupies look like corpses. When one of them attacks her in the girls’ locker room, Carly decides the word “victim” is not in her vocabulary and goes on the hunt for answers.
Finding sexy, college physics major and certified brainiac, Javier, seems like a perfect stroke of luck. Thanks to a weakened electromagnetic field, Javier is a paranormal medium who knows all about her stalkers. They call themselves the Diagora—soul stealers intent on killing every medium on earth and consuming their spiritual energy. And get this—Javier insists Carly’s a medium, too. A gene inherited from her dead grandmother. The Diagora have already taken her grandmother’s soul. Carly is their next target.
With Javier’s unwavering support, she vows to keep herself alive and be the hero who frees her grandmother’s soul. Stuck in the middle of a centuries-old battle with the Diagora that threatens the fate of all mediums and even ordinary humans, Carly stands to lose everything she never even knew she wanted—her normal life, her afterlife and Javier.
MAGNETIC is a standalone novel with series potential, complete at 80,000 words. It will appeal to fans of Lee Nichols’ DECEPTION for its similar storylines involving the spirit world and dark family secrets.
Thank you for considering my novel. I look forward to hearing from you.
Let Jeanmarie know what you think of her query letter in the comments, please!
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